well okay, im going to make you pay and let you eat your words lol
straight up;
Why do you use so many friggin notes? you know how hard it is to master a track like this?
Do you? :D
this is what you said:
I tried to build upon the same things that I did in "Cosmic Stream of Life" and "End of the Day" in this.
and this is what i think of that:
Its not always okay to build upon the ideas youve done already.. sometimes it works really well, and i agree you should take full advantage lol. however i think this time you milked the cow to many times.
Intro: i have not much to tell you because its simple yet effective.
2nd intro/build-up: i just love when a song has more then 1 intro or build ups before getting 'to the point' you get my point? lol
when the build up stops at 1:09 i can not determine what just happend.. did you go from intro to klimax? or.. intro to a 2nd or possible 3rd intro? sorry to tell but its confusing meh lol.
i love the deep impact at 1:38, you did well with the transitions in general in this song.
however its hard to tell as to what is what.. there is no actual structure what so ever, you go from A to B to A to C which is fine i guess, but its not working on me. also a breakdown? where is it?
only short 'rest' moments, guess you just really went all out with the 'hyper energetic mash' lol maybe next time try to create a song with an intro, break, chorus, outro keep it simple BUT just as energetic.
and dont forget to reduce the note usage lol. you can always layer sounds with the same melody or counter-layer them like Exilious said. or just use a counter(different) melody..