Hmm
Youre idea's are cool, but the mixing and stuff is a bit low leveled,
im especially missing kick-compression.
and ofcourse some better cymbals and/or percussion would be nice to roll that compressed kick and make an awsome off or on -beat bass to it as a following for the synth's / pad's / arp's ect. :D
These synth choices are a bit harsh, i get more the feeling that these fit better in hardstyle or some other hard stuff like hardtrance.
positive pointers:
-Trancegate is nice!
-bass BEAT is great, fits the notes nicely
-this kick youre using could be compressed in an awsome way! :)
hope this helps you a bit on a next trance journey :)
Youll get my 8 n 5ed!
-Timo